it's aggresive and bears a ranting style, and i happen to like it. i've taken a while pondering over this, as the first time i read it i was far too upset in my life to understand anything. but the second time around i can concentrate. i loved the last line - it had power and fury and strength, and even came as a bit of a surprise.
there's too many rhetorical questions in the first stanza. or so i think. it looks busy.
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It seemed a tad bit like a child talking back to his mother about how he is right and she is wrong. Not sure if you were going for that or not.
My only real comment is that "Don't love me 'cos I don't have a heart/to give you. " twigged the cliche-o-meter.
Apart from that, a decent rant poem; very good.